Utku Hasbay "All of my sentences sound same."

UTKU HASBAY

    The main topic that we choose for ourselves is my native language is not English and the “All of my sentences sound the same.” is the subtitle that I choose to make a presentation about.

 As an international student I have a hard time with writing fluent English papers. When I review my papers and try to compare them with the “perfect” ones. I realized that I don’t know how to use transition words such as furthermore, and, so, because, but, nor, where, which. Lacking of using transition words my sentences usually sound like, I am emphasizing same points. So this problem bothers the reader and my papers are far from being fluent. Let me give some examples that I took from Leo:

Original	The two countries reached an agreement on trade policies. They then were able to complete their peace treaty.
Revision	After the two countries reached an agreement on trade policies, they were able to complete their peace treaty.

                                    EX 1*

Original	The program's format allows individual users to make changes. This can be done each time users encounter problems in implementing the program.
Revision	The program's format allows individual users to make changes whenever they encounter problems implementing the program.

                                     EX 2*

 

 As we can see from the examples, when we use those short but extremely significant words in correct place of our sentences, they change the way how our sentences sound, they help us to make our paper smoothly and more excited. Also they undertake the role of being main component between sentences as well as paragraphs.

*Sources for EX 1 and 2: http://leo.stcloudstate.edu/style/sentencev.html  (9/17/2012)